Descriptive writing

This week we have been writing about something we done in the Easter weekend. I wrote about laser strike Here is a paragraph.

I look at my health and then up and see Arielle shooting me from behind, I run away so she’s not shooting me when I regenerate. I get shot many times and don’t know how until I look around and see Sebastian shooting be in the shoulder from a long distance. I run and look towards most of the noise is coming from and see Ittai doing well. I run toward Tane to help him out while Mum is shooting him. I look at how much points I have, 3200, luckily you don’t get points taken off when you get shot. ‘THE GAME HAS ENDED’ I hear through the speaker.